never do an extended writing on the bus.
The past few days i have been rushing my chinese written task, trying to get it to a good, decent grade. and for this cause, i've been doing my work on the bus. yesterday, i wrote my rationale foe my written task in the duration of my bus ride, and today when i let my chinese teacher see, she was kinda mad at my standard of chinese. she pointed out just TWO examples of my incorrigible chinese and i really, honestly CANNOT BELIEVE i wrote that.
I just went to correct it further. and i CAN'T BELIEVE I WROTE THAT. every sentence i go "WHAT THE HELL AM I WRITING?!"
This is the original, try reading it, even if ure bad at chinese.
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以下文章写的是个访问，关于肥胖的话题。访员是个<<早安，您好>>的主持人。受访者是一位健康专家。减肥话题主要是关于现代人怎么这个访问的话题是讨论不同的减肥方法，谈它们的好还，对身体的影响。
这个访问谈不同的减肥问题，主要的目的是告诉大众运动才是减肥最正确，最安全的方法。这个访谈绝食，整形，服用减肥药物的危险和短处。这个访问反映了现代人为了要拥有苗条身材，而且懒得运动的现象。在访问中，受访者有提出一些证据来解释这个现象。
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Well it's nothing to be proud about.
Compare that to my near-completed rationale.
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这是一章关于肥胖问题的访问稿。访员是<<早安，您好>>的主持人。受访者是一位在食物营养和生物化学方面的专家。这个访问讨论不同的减肥方法(节食，整形，服用药物，运动)，谈它们的好坏以及对身体的影响。
这个访问主要的目的是通知大众运动是最正确，最安全的减肥方法。受访者也解释绝食，整形，服用药物的危险和短处。这个访问反映了现代人想拥有苗条身材，可是懒得运动的现象，他们的懒惰是他们寻找别的减肥方法的缘故-专家解释这些方法的短处。在访问中，专家也例数据，利用了科学道理来加强说服力。
我在写这章访问稿所遇到的问题是寻找资料的难度。之后就是把资料用在访问稿上，有把整个访问稿的字术保持在1200字内。
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you can see the hell of a difference.
Writing on the bus, especially when you are changing from bus to bus, kills your chain of thought. you end off somewhere and continue somewhere else, so does your thoughts, reasoning, logic, and most of all, writing. All these turn my chinese to an unreadable block of letters, a standard which even a primary 4 can easily surpass.
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